Welcome to Gimp Chat, swb.
Altogether a satisfying piece. I would be pleased with myself if it had come off my drawing board.
Some particulars. You're thinking that there is an ever so slight sense of emptiness in the lower right region. I concur; but it is ever so slight. K1TesseraEna and others here vote for somewhat stronger colors. I conditionally concur; I would not, however, broadly, generally, uniformly increase the saturation of the leaves or warm the color climate. On the whole I like the pastel just the way it is. Mainly. But I do think the cry for stronger color voiced by people here and this *slight* sense of emptiness are related.
My theory is that the lower right hand corner of the piece, where the color is darkest, and the typographic element together work as framing devices which bracket an implicit rectangle roughly running from the center of the piece to the lower right hand corner. And there is nothing in particular there, for the leaves, on the whole act as a texture, with no one leaf (or anything else) standing out as an element of interest in this implicit rectangle (and this implicit frame). That is where I Think the sense of emptiness is coming from, and the general consesus here is to fill it with color.
My sense is to tell a story. I'd like to put one leaf there that is just ever so slightly more saturated, or perhaps of a slightly warmer color climate, and, on the whole, slightly larger. That leaf is a recent arrival; perhaps just fallen, and so is not quite as far along in the business of fading and shrinking that the other leaves are undergoing, because that is the story of leaves in fall, they descend from the heights in a colorful swirl and come to the ground and are bright for a time and then fade. Now, of course, you're not going to bang people over the head with this idea; it will be a deft touch, carefully done. A new arrival, slightly warmer, slightly younger, slightly more brash than the rest. It is the thing that fills the frame. Then, I think you have your piece.
My two cents.
Garry
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