PhotoMaster wrote:
My only problem with the image is that it's so much better than I can do!
Seriously, it may be a little emotional, but artistically I think it's excellent
Heh, thanks, there is always room for improvement though, as evidenced by this thread.
dinasset wrote:
Griatch wrote:
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@dinasset
That is perfectly fine, not everyone can like everything the same. Just saying that is not very useful to me though, could you elaborate more on what you don't like and why?
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Griatch
Aesthetically I don't like the overall figure, but this is a question of personal taste.
Technically (and here maybe I can be of a little help) the position of the turned face and the shoulders is not correct IMO: every time one turns from the back the head to the left more or less automatically the right shoulder moves forwards (and the left one also maybe a bit backwards).
I was looking for an image to better explain what I can't precisely say in words, the attached images are not exactly what I was looking for but I post it here, if they can help.
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Excellent feedback, just what I was looking for, thankyou! I have changed the structure of her shoulders a bit (which also makes her a little less "beefy" over the shoulders) and rotated the upper torso more, check it out,
ofnuts wrote:
I agree with Dinasset that the head looks a bit bolted on. In addition, the right arm looks too thin, and too round at the elbow, and I would expect the heel (no need to tell which side
) to flatten out on the ground. As it is, it looks made of wood.
The scars do elicit questions. I would expect the girl to have fight scars (mostly on the front, then). Scars on the back are usually due to passive beating, and tend to be parallel, not random as they are here.
Good points, as usual. I have now updated her arm and elbow - those joints are damn tricky to get right in perspective! Hopefully her head should fit better along with the changes to the shoulders and also by making the neck blend a little more into the chin. I also went and flattened out her foot more, she certainly looks much more "grounded" now; I guess that makes sense since all of her weight is on that one foot.
As for the scars, there are many ways to get scars like this. Rolling in broken glass, through barbed wires, thorns, even backstabs with smaller blades. The possibilities are endless.
Or like my
Jester would say if she had scars like this and someone asked her about it: "That's what you get for doing cartwheels in a library - the paper cuts are terrible!"
Fran6 wrote:
It's a difficult exercice here ! I see some problems of proportions. Right arm is to small, head too ? But the idea is very good ! Don't give up !
Thanks! Studies like these are good for practicing anatomy in perspective.
sallyanne wrote:
Very nice Griatch. Thought it was from 'where red apples lie'
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Thanks, yep, that leg is something of a giveaway...
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Griatch