Indeed. Remember that this is just a small short-story snippet from Where Red Apples Lie.

Thanks! This makes me very happy, for I much enjoy the storytelling, maybe even more than doing the artwork.
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I wasn't expecting that, but I really don't know what I was expecting...

It does remind me of a life lesson I learned the hard way - Never judge a book by it's cover

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Can't have you expecting things now, can I?
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Yikes, this actually happened to me at my Senior prom. The day I actually hoped a huge black void would open under me and swallow me whole. Good memories... What are friends for, right?

it's getting exciting...what will the girl say, what will the narrator do! Will they speak to each other?

I'm loving the story and loving the art. Griatch, you just do the most cool stuff.

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Yep. what are friends for.

What indeed!

Thanks! Comments like this make my day.
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Time of reckoning, do or die! My money is on a smile and verbal exchange. Will I be disappointed, only the narrator knows...

Will the narrator have the courage to break the silence, will he have the nerve to answer if she speaks?

... and what about Naomi?

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There - the last page of this little short story, a snippet from the pages of Where Red Apples Lie. No, the story doesn't end here, it goes on quite substantially from this point. Yep, it's a cliffhanger, that's the point of a short-story.

I hope it was enjoyable up to this point, looking back I think I found my footing somewhat better along the way, I'm happier with the later pages than the very first ones. I'm of course very interested in overall comments and critique concerning the whole nine pages as a whole, what worked, what didn't and so on, so I can improve until next time I pull myself together long enough to put up a full sequence like this. Thanks for reading!
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Heh, had to look that one up. Cool reference! And strangely fitting.
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Interesting style, remembers me of a Franco-belgian artist whose name eludes me (Loisel?), with a dash of Japaneses. The three pix with the hand, the tip of the crutch, and the girl are brilliant. They read like a storyboard for a movie. The story is a bit short, hope we will see the rest.

Régis Loisel? That's high praise, his La Quête de l'oiseau du temps (The quest for the time-bird) is a masterpiece of modern European comics. If I could ever come close to depict worlds as detailed as him, I'd be happy ... long way to go there though!
Whereas I tried to avoid the storyboard-style for this work (I feel it often leads to "spacious" comics that look flashy but have relatively little intrigue and content per page), it's nice for breaking up the pace here and there. Glad you liked it!
Yes, it's a short-story after all But yes, this is a "to be continued" thing. Time Will Tell.
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I do hope there is more to the story...or are we going to have to keep thinking of our own possibilities? I like the style and the pace of the comic...and the strange futuristic feel of it. I felt like an outsider, not totally understanding the local mindset, but was fascinated nevertheless.

Brilliant! There COULD be resolution to the story, but we *dont know it*... We can't *see* the "tea". Kind of positive frustration, fires up imagination.

Wonderful storytelling. Very well chosen camera angles and layouts.

Yes, this was good. Observant human interest story, fine execution.

Griatch , a great story and I agree with all the comments. The red mug is nice (reminds me of Schindlers List, the girl with the red coat in the b/w ). I was just wondering if in addition the girl's eyes (eyes only of the girl with the red mug) could not be coloured blue for extra effect? She only shows her eyes three or four times and I think it would add to the intimacy/ rapport the observer/ reader feels with the girl.
Just my opinion!

Is her cup half full, or half empty?

That is a success then, I wanted to hint at a slightly different world without making it too explicit. There is indeed more to the story, although there is no telling when I'll actually draw it.

Hehe, I enjoy the storytelling a lot, that was really my main interest in making this; I learned a lot along the way too.


Ah, you are right, I remember the girl with the red coat now that you mention it! That was a cool touch in that movie.
Adding colour to the girl's eyes is an idea, although I'm not sure if it wouldn't diminish the effect of the few red things. The red items of this story are after all not there just for artistic effect ... it is called Where red apples lie for a reason ...
Coincidentally her eyes are green rather than blue (I happen to know that since I wrote this as a book long before ever deciding how to paint it).

Indeed.
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